Wikijunior talk:Ancient Civilizations/Chinese

does anyone have some info on ancient china myths and beliefs???-larissa
 * Yes. See Wikijunior:Ancient Civilizations/Chinese. As for myths, I know a few since I'm from Hong Kong. Like there are ten suns and some guy shot them down and became king found the elixir of life and her wife stole it and ate it and went to the moon where she met a good-hearted rabbit and a crazy man who kept trying to chop down a tree.  Kayau  David Copperfield  MOBY DICK   the great gatsby  01:00, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * P.S. I know more than that. In fact, I just wrote a Wikipedia article about the 'crazy man'.  Kayau  David Copperfield  MOBY DICK   the great gatsby  03:03, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

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Here is my report:

Coverage
Acceptable. Needs:
 * A concise history of Qin and Han Dynasties
 * An introduction of the six types of characters
 * How Chanjie created Chinese characters
 * Zhu Geliang
 * Li Po
 * Du Fu

I guess Li and Du weren't ancient enough.  Kayau  David Copperfield  MOBY DICK   the great gatsby  06:24, 3 August 2009 (UTC)

Accuracy
Good - except for the history part.
 * I learnt in school that it's spelt Hwang-He and not Hwang Ho.
 * I also learnt that the word China came from the word china because we Chinese make good china.
 * However, the romanisation is terrible.
 * The babarians allied with the Marquis of Shen against You of Zhou because You of Zhou neglected his subjects' pleads and divorced Queen Shen.
 * They weren't separated by 'chiefs'. China was separated by its lords. They were originally dukes and marquises but many of them declared themselves 'king'.
 * During the spring and autumn period, they still listened to the King of Zhou's orders.
 * The eastern Zhou dynasty was complicated and messy.
 * There is nothing - NOTHING! - about anything after Qin Shihuangdi's conquest.

Grammar and tone
Good in general. There are one or two spots that 8-year-olds may not be able to comprehend, though. I have corrected a few mistakes, butI'll be looking for more.

I believe that, after these improvements, this module will be able to get the top grade for all three areas.  Kayau  David Copperfield  MOBY DICK   the great gatsby  01:07, 3 August 2009 (UTC)

Four Greatest Ancient Civilizations
The article starts with "four greatest ancient civilizations". This is a very confusing and subjective phrase. I assume it's talking about the 4 Old World Cradles of Civilization (Sumer, Egypt, Indus Valley, Yellow River); however, that still doesn't warrant calling them the "greatest". "Original" would be more appropriate.