User talk:Rej00012

Always Visible
As someone who is active on various media platforms, it is difficult to go invisible and to keep what information I do post online private under my control. The fact I post different pieces of information about myself to different platforms does not help the situation. I am also aware that, even though I am protected by the Personal Information Act, it does not stop companies from selling my information to sub parties so they can send me spam emails or put up adverts on my timeline suitable to my likes, dislikes and interests.

With each passing year I find it more and more difficult to become invisible whilst being online. I know I can turn off my notifications and sometimes Facebook allows me to hide my online presence but it is becoming harder to do so. Why? Because everyone these days seem to only be reachable via facebook messenger or snapchat. These are the two platforms I am most active on as those are the ones where I have the most accessibility to contact those who I am friends with or work with. With every new phone that I get, I find myself with less and less actual contacts being transferred, the exceptions being my parents, my friend who i’ve known for almost a decade and the occasional friend who I am talking to who has ran out of data. Other than that, I don’t bother. It is making it difficult to ignore that ‘always on culture’ that has been rising over the past two decades. I still like to switch myself off, and to leave my phone when I go for a bath or a walk, however i am always visible. I never log out of any of my social media accounts unless I am switching over a platform, or using a friends phone or laptop.

The forms of visibility takes on two forms for me: active and passive. What I mean by active is that when I am using my social media, for instance sending out a tweet or uploading a photo to Instagram. To me, that kind of visibility is when I am being active and posting on the media platforms, and people know I am online because they can see the little green ball beside my name, or it tells them at the top of their screens that I’ve logged in. The Passive is the fact that I may not be active but I am still online. Like I can put my phone away and not respond to any messages for a while, but I am still there, still logged in and still only a swipe away from responding.

As mentioned previously, the information available about me online varies from platform to platform. For example, my playstation network account is literally just my username, which only tells people my potential first name. The polar opposite is my Facebook account, where is has almost everything about me online: my family, my friends, what I look like, where I’ve been on holiday, what I’ve done throughout the day. I’ve noticed the older I have become, the less information about myself that I share online. I still enjoy sharing photos on my snapchat story or on instagram but I have those accounts set to private and only people following me can see them. I believe that I do not have all that much control over what is online about myself. Yes, what I put up personally is my decision, and mine alone and that I have complete control over that but it is not just me. Other people can upload photos of me, tag myself in locations and even tell people I’m in a relationship with them. The information I elect to put up, and the information I have been tagged in is all I am aware off that is online. It does not stop people posting things without my knowledge, or companies finding my information online and selling it to other companies for them to send me emails or put up specific adverts on my timelines that are targeted to me. I know for a fact if I look up a certain hashtag on Tumblr, then a lot of ‘suggestions’ come up with profiles relating to that hashtag I looked up once. Once something has been put online, it is there forever.

Because a lot of my social networking sights are linked together, mainly my Facebook account and my instagram account, information can pass easily from one sight to another. I also use these networks on various platforms: my laptop, my IPad and my phone are my main go to platforms, but that is not to say that different companies are spying on my information through the different platforms I use.

I know what information I have personally chosen to share, and I am aware on what information my friends and family have shared about me but that does not stop people posting information online, or even taking my identity and information to use for their. Own personal gain. I may not always be on, but i am always present and visible online due to the changing in socialising. Rej00012 (discuss • contribs) 22:25, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

Comments
Hello! I hope you are having a good day. The weather is nice today- its not too cold for once! I find it interesting that you brought up the concept that different companies are able to spy on you through different methods on different devices. Definitely something I'd look into if I had more time (maybe after all my deadlines are in). You also brought up the idea of people using the information you share online to portray as themselves. That is a concept I definitely don't think about to too much of an extent- mostly because I can't imagine somebody wanting to take my identity as their own. But it is something which could easily be done and I should therefore probably be giving it a lot more thought than I am currently! Good points made here for sure.

Also, you should consider joining the universities film making society next semester: AirTV - it is a bunch of fun, I promise. We meet on Wednesday's at 7pm in W1.

Anyway, I enjoyed reading your post very much! I hope you are finding your way through the collaborative essay ok! I cannot wait until Thursday when I can finally stop working on it and then we have no more deadlines for this course until April!

Digitalmediafiend (discuss • contribs) 12:22, 28 March 2018 (UTC)

The weather is so nice today! I'm surprised at how warm it actually is. Looks like spring has sprung. I feel like I am more aware of people stealing other people's online identities is because whilst in high school, a group of my 'friends' create a fake profile using my own profile picture and information that I had put on Facebook at the time, which wasn't that much but enough to make me more wary about what I now put online. I think online identity theft is something you don't often think about unless it happens to you personally, or someone close to you.

My collab essay is going good, glad I have the extension so I can work on it more. Hope everything is going well for you too :) 1. This piece brings up some really valid and interesting points. The first is how hard it is to become invisible once information is out there. You explain well how difficult it is to socialise without being accessible via a social media platform which is something to ponder with analysing digital culture and social relationships. Another point I liked was how you divide your visibility between active and passive. This was a more physical way to make yourself less visible I didn’t even consider, I thought about how to be less visible while still online as it’s such a big part of my life! This would be fun to develop on because it could combine sociological paths with a media point of view. One point you could have expanded on was how linking together creates further issues with being offline and how spying is an evidently real possibility in this digital age, but other than that this was a good informed personal view of online visibility! MillyZombie (discuss • contribs) 11:46, 7 March 2018 (UTC)

I think you are right in that I should discuss how it is becoming easier for people to spy on us. There are a lot of conspiracy theories about the government using our technology to spy on us and a lot of them have turned out to be true. I'm wondering what's your opinion on this and if we can truly become invisible in an increasingly visible world Rej00012 (discuss • contribs) 18:16, 19 March 2018 (UTC)

I definitely find myself reading and becoming more interested in conspiracy theories! I personally think anonymity online is much less true than we believe it to be. Whilst we have the option to make ourselves hard to find I don't think we truly ever can. There's a lot of ways people would be able to find you, surely? When I think about the average person at least, I myself wouldn't know where to begin finding an anonymous person, but someone with a higher understanding of IP addresses and cache would at least have some information. I think it's a scary thought, though. With the public knowledge of something such as the deep web too, it's concerning there are people who feel the need to go completely anonymous. While I didn't read all of this article, it definitely gave me some new avenues to think about in regards to our availability online and why people use things such as the deep web. MillyZombie (discuss • contribs) 19:15, 19 March 2018 (UTC)

Conspiracy theories is just one way on looking at how people see the world, and more importantly, the online world. With s much information circling the net, it's difficult to know what is real and what is false, making it difficult to trust those who you meet online. I know for a fact that a friend of mine was tricked into believing a girl he met on an online dating app was lead to believe she was seventeen, only to find out she was in fact fifteen. It's a scary thought. I agree with you there that, although the average person may not be able to find random person online, there are those with a higher knowledge that can. It goes back to the days before the internet: people were able to find people who not much was known about them, these days it seems easier to do so however. I remember Channel Four have done a series of documentaries seeing if a normal person can truly go off the grid and escape being capture by highly trained experts (although the name of the show has gone from me right now). It's a scary thougyht that Big Brother is always watching us!

I think you've made a valid point on misinformation in a digital age. I too have many personal experiences from friends with catfishes or other online 'scams'. It's really hard to guarantee who we are speaking to is who they say they are. If people are able to track us down offline, I just think it must be traceable online! But then again, there are many stories where online assailants have gotten away with things, such as the exploits of Anonymous! While not fully relating to our essay, this article was an interesting read on the social culture surrounding online identity and how/why we disclose information. We could link this back to our study however, mainly in the fandom identity area, by linking our availability online to the fan driven online communities? That could be interesting to research (if we had the time and resources to do so!) MillyZombie (discuss • contribs) 15:23, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

Catfishing has become such a problem with these days. It is so easy to fall into scams from Facebook adverts and online dating websites. I keep trying too have the 'safe online talk' with my parents because they don't quite realise what danger they are in, but they just dismiss me as being young and they are more experienced that I. I'll have a look into the article when I have more time. It would be such an interesting topic to look into, especially since I am into conspiracy theories and whether or not we can truly disappear. To link it to to Transmedia, however, have you heard about people being catfished by people on online games? I remember when I was younger I used to have several club penguin boyfriends who could have honestly been anyone and I would never have known. Rej00012 (discuss • contribs)

I'm still surprised how often people appear to fall for it though with how well known it has become, but then again I suppose those more likely to fall victim would be those less familiar with the internet and it's environment/culture. I think Catfishing has led to to other social media phenomena like Instagram Jealousy (wherein people become self conscious and compare themselves to "instafamous" people and then seriously altered their lives for likes and followers on instagram). Another worrying thing I think that stems from overuse of social media is anxiety. This site gives a brief overview, but a lot of people have been affected by it! On a personal level, I can see both sides. On one hand I agree that it can exacerbate anxious feelings when you're feeling deprived of attention or emotionally vulnerable anyway, but mostly for me I use it to calm myself during anxious attacks. But I can definitely see why overuse can cause it! Have you had any personal experience with this? As a link to Transmedia, do you think the ongoing building of storyworlds and media transformation could make this an even more common problem in the future? MillyZombie (discuss • contribs) 20:25, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

I think the older generations are more likely to fall victim to online scams because the internet has come a long way from when they were young, and not everyone has adpated efficiently enough. I'm the same: I often find myself struggling to keep up with new social media platforms but I am at that stage in life were I also do not care about the latest 'trends'. I agree with the whole rise of 'instafamous' but it can also be related to when vine existed and being YouTube famous. It's created an entirely new job world for people and nt everyone makes it, it's just another day in Hollywood in reality. I know when I was younger, I was constanty comparing myself to people go got dozens of likes on their Facebook or Bebo (God, that's going back a long time) posts and how many follwoers everyone had compared to me. It made me feel so insecure for a long time when I saw extremely pretty girls blow up my news feeds. I admit I do use social media more often when I am feeling anxious and in uncomfortable situations and I thin a lot of the generations younger than ourselves have started doing this more and more, it's something I'd like to look into at some point. In response to your question about Transmedia, I feel like social media is attempting to force people to change their storyworlds and views to fit their own. I know Tumblr has a huge problem with this: there's an entire community that cries outrage whenever something happens that doesn't fit their views. For example: I know a lot of people online are campaigning for Elsa from disney's Frozen to be gay but Disney is reluctant and I can see why: A lot of parents don't want their children exposed to that culture at a young age, and after the outcry when a character was hinted to be gay in the remake of Beauty and The Beast (Condon: 2017), I can see why Disney doesn't want to make a main, and extremely popular character an LGBTQ+ member. What are your views on this? Rej00012 (discuss • contribs) 10:58, 23 March 2018 (UTC)

I actually disagree with your views on Tumblr as a community, I think Tumblr as a whole is trying to be a positive force for social change. I think the surrounding communities belittle Tumblr as it's a social media for "kids" and "social justice warriors" (which, I don't even see how that could be an insult to be honest) to make their anger seem somehow less valid. Especially considering the huge far right community that still exists on Tumblr, they're not bashed as much as 'kids' trying to change the world for better. I think it's less about changing to fit Tumblr's views (as I don't think a website with 30-50 million active users has one single viewpoint) and more to be representative of minorities and challenging social norms.

I find a lot wrong in your last comments though, I personally do not see any issue with having LGBT+ characters in popular culture, even for kids. I'm queer and knew from a young age, and I grew up exclusively around heterosexual media and it alienated me. I don't think it's right to consider it a 'culture' either, and parents who don't want it around their children don't usually have any other reason than "it might make my kids gay" (so... what's wrong with that?). I can see why Disney as a company wouldn't, of course, but it's not because I agree with those thoughts, it's because Disney as a whole has been a little behind in civil rights and still has issues to this day. As for the response to LeFou being gay, it was never confirmed and as a queer again, it's not good representation. If he were to be gay, he was in love with his straight best friend, his name is literally "The Fool", and he's not a nice person.

I think having main characters as LGBT+ would be a positive thing. I think there will always be criticisms and homophobic comments, but it's important to continue despite them and not give up on representation just because some people can't explain to their kids what being gay is. There was outcry at the idea of interracial marriage when first proposed, but I don't think anyone in their right mind would consider that wrong now. Representation is important for all social factors however, not just sexuality and gender.

To move away from this though, what are your views on Disney parks rides as a form of Transmedia? I'm debating with myself if they count, but I would be interested to hear your views on this. Do they help open the story world or do they make you more aware it's fake because you're on a theme ride? MillyZombie (discuss • contribs) 12:11, 23 March 2018 (UTC)

I agree that the Tumblr community is a force of positive social change but sometimes I feel they take it too far and don't always look at the bigger picture. I feel like you misunderstood my comments. As someone who is also queer, I am down for good representation and fighting for that but I can also see why bigger companies such as Disney are not quite ready to take the risk and that is something everyone should take into consideration. LeFou may not be the best representation but I feel, however, it is a step in the right direction. The TV and movie industry definitely needs more mainstream, main LGBTQ+ characters, and I feel like some shows are striving towards brekaing away the stereotypes, for example Brooklyn Nine Nine, which has a gay character, and the jokes are not unclassy and homophobic. I think that the world has a long way to go before we rid of all homophobia and hate, but at least the younger generations are fighting that.

Anyway, back to Transmedia. I think you bring up an excellent question and it's honestly difficult to say. I think it is a form of world-building but it is transmedia as it is not on any sort of media platform (unless you count the electronic components as a ride). So, I think it reflects what Fast and Örneberg say here and that it is part of the branding-world build rather than story-world building. I believe it depends on what age you are at. When I was a little kid and went to Disney for the first time, it was absolutely magical because I was in this fantasy world that I adored and got to meet all my favourite characters. Now, when I visit the theme parks it is out of nostalgic love for Disney, and because I love theme parks. Rej00012 (discuss • contribs) 16:16, 23 March 2018 (UTC)

I think it's hard to convey tone, and both of us have personal views but I respect yours and can see some sides! I think we both had a slight tone miscommunication but it was a healthy discussion either way!

I think with your comments on the rides as media made me open my eyes wider. I was too consumed in thinking about Storyworld building to consider the forms of media it takes. Thanks! The reading was also really helpful! If you have any more to discuss feel free to tag me again! MillyZombie (discuss • contribs) 00:19, 25 March 2018 (UTC)

Transmedia World-Building: Annotated Bibilography II
Fast, K. & Örnebring, H., 2017: “Transmedia World-Building: The Shadow (1931-present) and Transformers (1984-present); International Journal of Culture Studies, 20(6): 636-652

In the article Fast and Örnebring examine the world-building of The Shadow (1831-present) and Transformers (1984-present) and how transmediality is used to expand and developed the respective worlds. The authors gathered their information from previous works written about transmedia as well as The Shadow and Transformers. Their research focuses on how world-building changes and adapts as franchises move across media platforms. This article will be useful to me as I am writing a collaborative essay on transmediality. The authors highlight their limitations by pointing out that very few scholars thane researched how the worlds’ are built up or torn down and also how the world-building works in practice (Fast and Örnebring: 2017: 639). Thus, the article concludes that branding-building has a greater influence than world-building. This article may be included in my research however it may not form the foundation.

Source:

Transmedia World Building: The Shadow (1931-present) and Transformers (1841-present)

Comments:
This is a concise and well written piece! It's really useful how this article uses two big case studies which is really helpful for understanding world building as well as giving it some context and will be useful to have a case study to refer to in our collaborative essay. I agree with the point that brand-building is definitely important and vital, however would it be possible to have the brand without the world? Are the two exclusive and perhaps world building is more important for those who are dedicated fans? Overall, an interesting article that has been analysed and concluded well.

Jeneds (discuss • contribs) 12:41, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

This piece is definitely useful for our collaborative essay, particularly about the movie world-bu8ilding elements. I think you raise an interesting point about branding. IO believe that franchise worlds can exist without branding however I thoroughly believe that branding allows franchises to expand their universes into different platforms and cultures. I think it is a matter of opinion on what is more important. I think branding is important for expansion however you need the world to exist before this. Do you think that world-building can exist without branding? This might be an interest topic to explore in our merchandising section of our essay Rej00012 (discuss • contribs) 14:19, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

I have to agree that franchise worlds can exist without branding, there's many examples of television shows and films that don't adhere to branding and merchandising. I completely agree that it allows the expansion of universes. Branding allows the product to become more visible, therefore the exposure means the world can build- ultimately creating profit for the company, and benefitting the fans as they gain more content and a bigger world. I think it can exist to a certain degree, but if you have a large world, it makes complete sense to create merchandising and branding. Branding highly benefits the world as it makes it more real for the fans, creating a dedicated fanbase and in turn, making larger profits. Yes, it should form a good argument in the essay. Jeneds (discuss • contribs) 11:22, 23 March 2018 (UTC)

I fully agree with your agrees on branding. I think without merchandising, or franchising a storyworld, then it is going to be contained to only a certain amount of fans. Take for example, the Marvel Cinematic Universe. When it first came on screen with Iron Man, it brought with it the already army of fans who had read to comics for years, and waited for their favourite superhero to make it on the big screen. Then you get the action buffs, who love a good action movie, and the kids who are all for a superhero movie and a character like Tony Stark because he is so cool. Marvel is a good example because it already had a huge fanbase before the expansion of its universe, but it also brought in a new kind of fan as well. Rej00012 (discuss • contribs) 16:24, 23 March 2018 (UTC)

Discussion
Hey Becca, how is your collaborative essay coming along? I hope you are navigating the Wiki platform alright, it can take a while to get the hang of things. I had a look on your discussion page for the essay and it looks really good. I like that you have related the topic of transmediality to something like Wonder Woman, as it makes the topic more relate-able for people who are perhaps not as knowledgeable about the topic, giving them an example to consider. Good luck with the rest of your essay, looking forward to reading it! Jfm00011 (discuss • contribs) 13:29, 3 April 2018 (UTC)

My collab essay is coming along fine. I have the rough draft written and I just need to fine tune it and cut it down because I have gone well over my word limit and haven’t even finished what I wanted to say (I think written my own 3000 word essay would be easier because I know so much about Wonder Women). How is yours coming along? I think I’ve got the basic of the wiki platform down (hopefully enough to pass), but I struggled at the beginning, yourself? We went through several other topics before we finally agreed on Wonder Woman. I am so sorry but what is your collab essay on again?? Rej00012 (discuss • contribs) 19:23, 3 April 2018 (UTC)

Collaborative Essay Reflective Account
Wikibooks is an online platform that allows users to post their research or information on whichever subject the user is interested in or researching. It also allows them to start discussions with other users by commenting or replying to users’ discussion pages and posts. It is a connected, interconnected platform which is accessible all the time, and whenever the user has WIFI connection or mobile data. It emphasises visibility as anyone can look up your user profile through either knowing your username or through your interactions or discussions that you have posted. By posting a discussion on Wikibooks it allows other users to search the subject that you have posted about and find it and comment, or even edit your work, it is extremely visible because it is so easy to search every and all subjects on the platform. Also, with the ability to comment and edit another user’s work, it is difficult to remain invisible on Wikibooks for too long. The only thing it does not show is when you are active at the time. You can look up when someone last posted or edited something, but it does not necessarily tell you if they are online at that moment in time or not. Wikibooks is probably on of the easiest, and best, platforms to use for a collaborative essay. It is awful to navigate until you have learned the basics and the layout, but afterwards, it can be decent. It is an easy platform in terms of uploading extracts and information onto the same book or page, as anyone can edit it. However, finding the said page can be difficult as sometimes it does not come up straight away whilst searching. By having a book and a discussion page, it allows everyone in the group to upload sources and materials on the discussion page that might be useful whilst keeping them separated from the book page, but it keeps them linked and together. It is a good thing to keep everything for the group on the same discussion page as it makes it easier to keep up to date with what the other members are doing, as well as interact with the discussion and have in-depth discussion about parts of the subject, in my case transmedia, and to discuss thing you may not have consider before. It fosters a community by allowing everyone to interact with one another. With the ability to edit, comment, reply and even tag other people in comments and works, it keeps everyone up to date and in touch with work they are interested. It also allows the ability to keep an eye on certain pages or discussion that you may be interested in, so you can always stay up to date with the latest discussion or comments. It is a community because everyone is there to help one another, by either commenting and suggesting edits or ideas, or even editing the work itself if a mistake has been made. The collaborative essay is a fine example, because you create a community within your group. My group did a lot of posting and commenting and suggested further readings and ideas that may be useful to our own respective research areas. The online collaborative essay represents digital commons in many ways. To begin with, it is done online which is a major factor of digital media, especially in the last two or three decades. It is done on a wildly accessible platform, which adds to the digital element. Most things that are done via a computer, laptop or mobile device is consider digital, therefore anything done online is digital commons. Another element is that fact that everything for the collaborative essay was posted online, found online, and submitted online. For most of the planning for my group, it was done online. One girl did not actually turn up for any of the meetings held, opting to be part of the meetings in a digital presence rather than a physical one. The subjects that the collaborative essay was about were all to do with digital media. for example, transmedia has advanced from analogue to digital over the last hundred years, so a lot of the research done was focused around the digital elements, or the progress to the digital elements. Inline emancipation is a difficult one to address. A lot of the material available online is easily accessible and easy to copy and paste, or to save without taking down anything from the original creator of the content. Wikibooks does have certain steps that prevent the use of stealing another people’s work. I know for a fact, several members of the digital media group had difficult at first uploading their wiki exercises until the specifically put in their user profile bios that it was for a university project. It is also almost impossible to add anything such as images to a wiki page without it being specifically from the database of free images tha Wikibooks has access too, or th user has copied in the address or rights from which they got the image from. Wikibooks does not allow one to ad in YouTube links to user discussions page sin order to prevent anyone underage clicking on a link that they should not see, or people using the video footage for their own personal gain and without crediting anything.

Comments
Hi Becca, Overall a really informative and concise summary and reflection of Wiki and its uses. Your opening sentence and paragraph is a good outline of wikibooks.

I think your point about visibility on Wiki is a really interesting analysis. I agree that through Wikibooks, you and your ideas are highly visible and easily traceable, but I think you make a good point about the fact we can't see whether a user is active or not. This is a large factor of internet visibility available on other platforms which makes it very visible that you are online and makes you accessible to contact and discuss.

I also agree with your points on the layout, it might have been useful to expand on which parts you found difficult- personally markup and the unorganised page made it really hard to navigate as I could get a bit lost when the discussion grew! But yes, once you get to grips with the coding and interface it becomes a bit easier!

You make a valid point about community, how there is always help there through being able to tag and comment on other people's work, which in essence is what a community does and is a feature that I also found useful. It's good how you related this sense of community to your own group work.

You relate Wikibooks very well to the topic of digital media, digital commons and the online world. You also make the point about 'digital' meetings instead of physical ones, Wiki definitely allows this with the discussion pages and collaborative elements. You also related it to your collaborative essay topic which was a good point!

i completely agree with your viewpoints on online emancipation, Wiki's strict spam filter and copyright rules make it difficult to be liberated.

Overall a really good and informative piece! It could have been useful to put more points about your own feelings and experience with wiki, such as the navigation issues you stated, and there are a few typos but this can easily be fixed and isn't really an issue. In general, I really enjoyed reading this, You've related it to the topic and you've organised your thoughts well.

Jeneds (discuss • contribs) 09:57, 16 April 2018 (UTC)

INSTRUCTOR FEEDBACK: DISCUSSION, ENGAGEMENT, CONTRIBS

 * Engagement on discussion pages of this standard attain the following grade descriptor for contribs. Whereas not all of the elements here will be directly relevant to your particular response to the brief, this will give you a clearer idea of how the grade you have been given relates to the standards and quality expected of work at this level:
 * Excellent. Among other things, contributions will probably demonstrate a complex, critical understanding of the themes of the module. They will communicate very effectively, making excellent and creative use of the possibilities of the form (including formatting, links, as well as perhaps copyright-free videos and images, linked to from Wiki Commons), and may be written with some skill and flair. They will address the assignment tasks in a thoughtful and transparent way on the Discussion Pages. They will make insightful connections between original examples and relevant concepts, justifying decision-making with transparency. They will be informed by serious reading and reflection, are likely to demonstrate originality of thought, and will probably be rewarding and informative for the reader as well as for fellow researchers collaborating. The wiki markup formatting will be impeccable.

Students should be engaging at least once a day, for the duration of the project. The following points illustrate how this engagement is evaluated.


 * Although not quite an ‘everyday’ activity, the evidence from your contribs shows that you engaged with the collaborative process for a number of the days that the project was live. There is evidence from your contribs that your engagement was meaningful and consistent throughout that percentage of the project period. In the round, these were very useful entries in terms of moving the project forward, and an appropriate level of engagement with the community is in evidence. Where you could have improved significantly, was in contributing to discussion with other groups on their group pages – which would suggest that you were at least starting to see the value in the way that the book’s themes overlap significantly.

Evidence from contribs to both editing and discussion of content (i.e. volume and breadth of editorial activity as evidenced through ‘contribs’). These are primarily considered for quality rather than quantity, but as a broad guideline: o	Each item on a contribs list that are 3000+ characters are deemed “considerable” o	Each item on a contribs list that are 2000+ characters are deemed “significant” o	Each item on a contribs list that are 1000+ characters are deemed “substantial” o	Items on a contribs list that are <1000 characters are important, and are considered in the round when evaluating contribs as a whole because of their aggregate value


 * One or two contribs registered as being under 1000 characters, with a mix of several others that are “significant”, “substantial” and a few regarded as “considerable” to the project. The elements of research and discussion of ideas are the useful ones for this criterion, and it’s on this that you really show your strengths. Excellent work.

•	Engagement with and learning from the community on Discussion Pages o	Evidence of peer-assisted learning and collaboration o	Evidence of reading, sharing, and application of research to the essay o	Evidence of peer-review of others’ work


 * Again, fairly strong. You pushed your arguments and the findings you made through your independent research and observation, and encouraged others to comment/respond, occasionally helped others in their work. There’s plenty of evidence of reading, application and discussion of ideas. Your contributions to the book page and discussion page stand out.

•	Reflexive, creative and well-managed use of Discussion Pages o	Clear delegation of tasks o	Clearly labelled sections and subsections o	Contributions are all signed


 * Perhaps the element that shows the least evidence in your work on the discussion pages. Nonetheless, you were clearly collaborating on the discussion pages. You have signed where necessary, so it’s easy to see where your contribs fit into the overall discussion.

•	Civility. Your conduct is a key component of any collaboration, especially in the context of an online knowledge-building community. Please respect others, as well as observe the rules for civility on wiki projects. All contribs are moderated.


 * You conducted yourself exceptionally well, showing generosity by sharing what you know with others – this is a key component of this project overall and suggests that you understand the value of this kind of working.

GregXenon01 (discuss • contribs) 13:36, 23 April 2018 (UTC)

Instructor Feedback on Wiki Exercise Portfolio
Posts and comments on other people’s work, of this standard, roughly corresponds to the following grade descriptor. Depending on where your actual mark is in relation to the making criteria as outlined in the relevant documentation, it should give you an idea of strengths and weaknesses within the achieved grade band overall:


 * Satisfactory. Among other things, satisfactory entries may try to relate an idea from the module to an original example, but might not be very convincing. They may waste space on synopsis or description, rather than making a point. They may have spelling or grammatical errors and typos. They might not demonstrate more than a single quick pass at the assignment, informed only by lecture and/or cursory reading. They may suggest reading but not thinking (or indeed the reverse). The wiki markup formatting will need some work.


 * This work is at the upper end of this grade band, so a little improvement will go a long way to attaining a higher mark, which, based upon your work in this project overall, is achievable. I think in order to engage with the wiki exercises a bit more, it might be useful for you to look at the Grade Descriptors and (especially for this, perhaps, the Understanding) criteria in the module handbook to get more of an idea of how to hit those targets.


 * Making more use of the wiki functionality and markup would have gone a long way to improving fluidity and functionality of posts. I suspect that, if you become more familiar and proficient with the platform, that this would have made a considerable difference.


 * Re: responses to other people’s posts – these are especially good at times. You framed some of your responses as questions to solicit discussion. This is, arguably, what discussion pages are all about. It is notable that toy also engaged in discussion in an open and critical way (that is to say, you've responded to what other people are saying and are contributing meaningfully to discussion).

General:
 * Reading and research: there is some evidence of critical engagement with set materials. I would have liked to have seen much more evidence of independent reading of appropriate academic and peer-reviewed material in your exercise responses.


 * Argument and analysis: some problems here in that your work tends to be on the descriptive sides, rather than fully articulated analysis. More evidence needed of critical thinking (through taking a position in relation to key ideas from the module, and supporting this position) as well as that of relational thinking (through making connections between key ideas from the module and wider literature, and supporting these connections).


 * Presentation: see above comment on use of wiki markup and organisational skills.

GregXenon01 (discuss • contribs) 11:25, 9 May 2018 (UTC)