User talk:JAYACEEE/sandbox

Hello JAYACEEE-- Nice article. Love the title. Here is some initial feedback.

Copy editing:
 * when copying and pasting, some of the titles that should be in italics (e.g. Black Mirror) lost their italics; they need them back.
 * parenthetical citations need to be deleted so that only the footnotes indicate the source used
 * you have at least one block quote that needs to be formatted so
 * your images need useful captions that connect them to the text

Making the text more "Webby":
 * some paragraphs are typical essay-length, that is, WAY too long for reading on the Web. Can you break them up?
 * The whole point of Web pages is hyperlinks. There are many words here that could be hyperlinked for the reader to get better context/background of what they are, from Black Mirror to Baidu.

Content: Dr. X (discuss • contribs) 22:20, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
 * This draft drifts from showing some awareness of its intended audience to being a paper written for Westerners. This remains its central issue. Since it will be published in wiki, you can have someone other (myself, for instance), fix the problem (though I warn you that I if I do, I would revise it not to be for Chinese readers). Or you could grapple with the issue yourself before it goes to the main space.
 * The text is still mostly expository rather than really educational. I feel that some further sections would help make it more of a lesson.