User:TDang/reviewing others work

The goal of your review is not to criticize or praise the work so far (although praise for good bits is certainly welcome). What's been done so far is supposed to be a rough start. Instead, your goal is to highlight some things which are working or not working to help with the project's development. Make sure you not only say something "needs work" or is "great", but say what about it should stay the same or be corrected or expanded.

Here's some things to keep in mind:
 * How clear is the goal of the writing? Can you tell what the purpose of the section is?
 * Given that, how clearly does it approach that goal?
 * Are there false starts-things which seem like they should be going somewhere, but don't?
 * Are there areas which seem especially interesting to you, and you'd like to see developed further?
 * Is there anything which seems to be missing overall? Is there an addition which would add a lot? (case study, theory, pictures, ...)
 * Does the material need references?