Talk:Public International Law/Human Rights Law/Human Rights Protection/Arab and Islamic Human Rights System

Review: 12 June 2023
Dear Mando,

Thanks for the great chapter. I agree with my two co-editors and only added minor comments.

Best, Raffaela

Review: 7 June 2023
Dear Mando,

Thank you for contributing this well-written and well-informed chapter. As with the other sub-chapters in the human rights law chapter, I would like to encourage you to invest a bit in making this sub-chapter fit better with the other sub-chapters so that the human rights law chapter is more coherent as a whole. I have added some comments on details and made some linguistic changes.

With best wishes, Sué

Sué González Hauck (discuss • contribs) 14:46, 7 June 2023 (UTC)

Review: May 26, 2023
Your chapter provides a fantastic elucidation of the diversity and peculiarities inherent within Arab/Islamic human rights systems. You have successfully navigated the multifaceted nature of these systems, shedding light on their cultural, religious, and historical foundations. Your chapter provides students with a comprehensive understanding of their key principles and practices.

You will also find some comments in your chapter in which I elaborate on something more specific. To view these comments, open your chapter page and click "Edit" in the top-right menu bar.

Some minor things:
 * You could add some links to other chapters of the textbook.
 * Note that I have made some linguistic improvements to the text

--Max Milas (discuss • contribs) 08:36, 26 May 2023 (UTC)

= Review: 27 October 2021=

Dear Mando,

Thank you very much for this terrific, far developed contribution. The chapter is great. Keep up the spirit! I really like your writing style. The short, vivid sentences should make the chapter catchy for students, but it also offers much more depth in terms of content than comparable textbooks.

I have seven minor comments:

1. In the first sentence you talk about "Middle East". The term is perceived by some people as discriminatory or at least Eurocentric. I would therefore not use it - if at all - without a short contextualization or quotation marks; especially because you then only refer to Arab region and Islamic world in the following sentences.

2 As far as I know, the Islamic documents are not binding. That would certainly be helpful as a clarification at the beginning.

3. You write that especially regarding women's rights and freedom of religion the Islamic documents lag behind universal standards. Here perhaps a short specification (in what way exactly?) would be interesting.

4 Before you use the term "claw-back clauses", it might be helpful for students to have a short clarification of what exactly this means. It should also be relevant for the African Charter. I could also integrate this into the Recurring Themes chapter, which you could then use as a reference.

5. The first version of the Arab Charter was not only criticized but never entered into force due to lack of ratifications. That might be a little more precise.

6. You could mention that the Arab Human Rights Committee cannot accept individual complaints.

7. If it is possible for you, you can add some footnotes to the text. This will be helpful for students.

If you would have covered the aspects anyway, just ignore my comments. Of course, the same goes if you disagree or want to focus differently. This is going to be a fantastic chapter!

--Max Milas (discuss • contribs) 17:53, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Thank you Max for these useful comments. I think I have addressed them and I have made some further improvements to the text.
 * Yes, the claw-back clauses should be in the recurring themes chapter since it is an issue concerning the African, Arab/Islamic and Asian systems of human rights.
 * Happy 2022!
 * Mando Mando Rachovitsa (discuss • contribs) 05:50, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

Review February 28, 2022
Dear Mando: First of all, apologies for inserting some of my earlier comments in the text and now some here.

Overall, the chapter contains relevant and well thought information. It would greatly benefit, however - I believe - if this information were more structured and better organized. By way of examples:

- the introductory paragraph is very important, as it guides the reader through the res of the chapter. Basic information about the main regional organizations ought to appear here, not later in the text. On content, it would be good to mention here that Arab and Islamic States are also memebrs of the AU - which is never mentioned in the chapter.

- there is some confusion beytween thematic and chronological orders, which do not seem to be followed consistently. It is a difficult topic, with multiple sometimes overlapping institutional and normative frameworks, that perhpas could be better explained.

I hobe it helps - if not, please, just ignore it.

--Annalisa.ciampi (discuss • contribs) 20:54, 28 February 2022 (UTC)

Review 6.04.2022
Dear Mando,

Thanks for the chapter, I really enjoyed reading it.

A couple of things you might consider when keep working on the chatper:

-	While I like the structure, it is not very well explained and some changes from one section to another are rather sudden. It could be useful to add a paragraph on that in the introduction. The Introduction speaks of the League of Arab Sates and Organization of Islamic Cooperation without showing how they are practically different and what the relevance for HR in the region is. Then the outline of the Chapter touches only (at least the section titles) upon the LAS. Then the last section brings in the Cooperation Council for the Arab States of the Gulf, which appears not to be connected with the two organization mentioned in the introduction.

-	There are (especially in part B) a lot of acronyms introduced, maybe consider whether you could use less. That would make the text easier to follow.

-	With regard to the Arab Independent Committee on Human Rights there is an entire paragraph on civil society engagement. While the paragraph is interesting, it sticks out a bit, as it is not clear why you engaged that much with this aspect with regard to the Committee. Maybe you could make clear in the text why this relevant or important.

-	One thing that I am missing is a short comment on non-Arabic Muslim countries and how their position is with regard to those organizations. Maybe part (B) would be a useful place for that.

-	I would also be interested in whether – if any – there is a stance by those organizations on universal human rights bodies and treaties.

Hope this what useful and again contratulations on the work Grazyna