Talk:Exercise as it relates to Disease/The association between walking and future risk of dementia in older men

Feedback --Benrattray (discuss • contribs) 01:53, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Grammar could be improved.
 * Background is interesting, but I think you could make it flow together (and read more easily). Perhaps also think about why it might be good to specifically look at walking.
 * Research from and research kind sections - suggest provide more detail, and interpretation in these sections. how might these things influence the interpretation of results, or implications of the findings? are there contextual constraints on the location for instance? What do different kinds of research tell you about the level of evidence of the study?
 * The limitation you mention is actually a delimitation (they meant to limit the research to males, its just means it cannot necessarily be interpreted as having the same meaning for a female population).
 * Lots of little paragraphs - perhaps consider how you can make the work flow together better.