Talk:Exercise as it relates to Disease/The Effect of Exercise on Nursing Home Residents with Alzheimer's Disease

Feedback --Benrattray (discuss • contribs) 04:24, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Perhaps try to have a clearer coherent story for the background that leads into the need for this research to have been completed. At the moment it is justified in the middle of the background and then more so. It just doesnt quite flow and reads like most of the ideas for the background have purely come from the actual paper being critiqued
 * research from section - what does this section suggest in terms of the context of the findings, or the implications. What other "from" information is there? What might it tell you about the level of evidence being presented?
 * research type section - probably needs more lay explanation of what it means, and what it means in terms of the level of evidence it provides to the area
 * research involved - as an example there is information about an MMSE score of 25, but the lay audience will not know what this means, nor its implications for the study. Think about the critique from this perspective.
 * results - do p values mean much to a lay audience?
 * discussion - the "targeted approach" comment is interesting.. did you want to expand on what is meant by that, and what evidence you have to support such a statement?