Talk:Exercise as it relates to Disease/Effect of exercise on patients with Rheumatoid Arthritis

Feedback --Benrattray (discuss • contribs) 02:24, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * You may want to work on the aesthetics, some clunky spacing etc at the moment. And that first solid paragraph - is that part of background?
 * First sentence - reference it?
 * Remember you are writing for a lay audience, some of the language used may be hard to follow - active phase, synovial... without some explanation
 * Acronyms are bad - they make it hard to read.
 * The background could flow into the actual paper you have critiqued more. e.g. Use the introduction to justify the need for this particular study
 * Research from and research type sections - more information, but more interpretation of what it means (in terms of context, implications, level of evidence it provides) is required.
 * Practical advice - what does "intensive exercise" mean?