Talk:Ethical Debates in Connected Culture 2019/Privacy 1: The Private Sphere

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 * GregXenon01 (discuss • contribs) 15:36, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Essay Discussion
Hi guys, we could use this section to post any interesting literature we come across related to our topic. I found two brief articles explaining where the concept of 'private sphere' came from:

https://inpropriapersona.com/articles/jurgen-habermas-on-the-public-and-private-spheres/

https://www.thoughtco.com/private-and-public-spheres-3026464

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 19:47, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Thank you, Nicola, for the articles, we will definitely use them. I think another excellent literature for our topic is "Papacharissi, Z. (2010) ‘A Private Sphere’ in A Private Sphere: Democracy in a Digital Age pp. 131-167" from our week one reading. There is one chapter only dedicated to Private Sphere.

Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

Agreed! Thank you for that reference it's a really good one. Following our discussion today I'll be posting the content sections we'll each be focusing on for the final essay very soon. We can then start posting any literature/drafted content to get going :)

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 19:15, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi girls, any new from the professor? Did he approve our topic? Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

Not yet, but I would suggest we start researching the subject. Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 15:39, 10 November 2019 (UTC)

Here's a re-cap of what we discussed and agreed earlier this week:

Proposed research question - How is social media affecting the private sphere?

Structure of the essay:

1 Introduction

2 Private Life (Klara) - This section will centre around the individual self on social media, addressing questions such as 'How private is the private sphere online?' and 'How is our data being used/misused?'

3 Political Sphere (Sara) - This section will focus on literature surrounding social media's effect on democracy (examples: social movements, political identities)

4 Case Study (Nicola) - This section will explore the relationship between our private selves and the political atmosphere on social media, using the Cambridge Analytica case to emphasise the literature that will be discussed earlier in the essay.

5 Conclusion

It's really important that the literature relates to the case study.

Please add on to this if you've thought of anything else after our meeting.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 16:09, 10 November 2019 (UTC)

Here are two useful videos explaining the Cambridge Analytica case in brief: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mrnXv-g4yKU https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q91nvbJSmS4 There is also a very interesting documentary on Netflix called The Great Hack which explores the scandal in greater detail. Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 16:18, 10 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, I've just posted a drafted summary describing the Cambridge Analytica case in about 500 words on the actual essay page. This is just a draft so I still need to clean it up, add references, etc. I would love to get your feedback on it :)

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 14:40, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

On another note, a large part of my section depends on the literature you mention in your sections, as it will be good for me to refer to it in the case study part. So please let me know when you have some literature written. Thanks!

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 14:42, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

Great job so far on your section! Once I will have some literature I will put it here. I will add my part on Friday evening before we meet on Sunday. Did the professor reply? Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

Thanks! Ok that would be great! Since we have lectures all day on Saturday I might need some more time to incorporate the literature into the case study, but I will continue to add on as much as I can before Sunday. I didn't receive an email back yet. Maybe one of you could try to email him too? Just in case?

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 18:56, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, I've added some more content using literature to discuss the case study. However, this will definitely need some editing once your sections are uploaded as I will be able to link the content.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 17:22, 13 November 2019 (UTC)

Whilst writing I came across some interesting articles which talk about the public/private spheres in relation to social media. Here are two which I found to be very useful:

Pariser, E. (2012). The filter bubble: What the Internet is hiding from you. Penguin UK.

Ford, S. M. (2011). Reconceptualizing the public/private distinction in the age of information technology. Information, Communication & Society, 14(4), 550-567.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 17:27, 13 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi team, how's the writing going? If you come across any literature that you think is useful to all of us please post it here. It would be really helpful :)

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 17:04, 14 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, I am writing my part now. I have a question, how would you say that private life, private sector is connected to the theory always-on? I am thinking about how to put it into sentence for the last 20 minutes and I cant figure out! Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

Hey Klara, so the main question you can be addressing here is how digital media is affecting the private sphere, how being 'Always On' is influencing the private sphere, and if digital media users are aware of the boundaries between the digital sphere and the public sphere anymore. Digital media has given users a platform to express themselves while giving them the sense of being able to control their privacy settings on their pages and that no one can view their information beyond their friends/followers, giving them a false sense of online privacy (arguable), and this brings about the notion of digital illiteracy among users, which you can expand further on. Hope this helps! Sara Hamad El Niel (discuss • contribs)

I agree! And this could be a good way of introducing the idea of anxieties over privacy as you noted in the main essay page. Well done guys!

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 14:57, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Let's explore this in class later this afternoon :)

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 12:50, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey Klara! I've looked at your drafted outline on the main essay page and I think it's great. If I could suggest one thing I would also refer to Pariser's work on The Filter Bubble. Pariser really focuses on the notion that information in today's digital world is largely personalised, which gives rise to serious questions in relation to the political sphere (which Sara will then be focusing on). For example, since the information we receive on our Facebook feeds greatly validate our beliefs, can we really say that our political opinions are our own? Or are we being manipulated by advertisers to think in a particular way? I believe this could be a good point to focus on before moving on the the Political section of the essay. What do you think? I'd love to get your feedback!

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 14:52, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

hey guys - some really excellent work so far, and I absolutely encourage you to keep up the good work! The section below is very useful, and I am expecting that you will build on this in the next few days. The work here will form the raw materials for your drafting process on the essay page. What I would advise, is that the example below (Papacharissi) is quite compressed - lots of ideas in here that are an accurate reflection of her arguments, but also, these are expressed here in very short form. So... building on this work I would take each of the sentences in this annotation, and expand on them, as each is an important element that could be built upon to establish your argument. In other words, follow up on each statement by a careful reading of Papcharissi herself, but ALSO each can be expanded upon through reference to further reading. e.g. "They create their own space where they reflect and act alone but not isolated" relates to Nancy Baym's work on blogging. It also relates in some ways with David Gauntlett's work on Making is Connecting perhaps? GregXenon01 (discuss • contribs) 14:54, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

hi again: I found this on the university library online catalogue... Privacy : A Very Short Introduction by Raymond Wacks chapter 4 on privacy and free speech. I think it could be really useful! GregXenon01 (discuss • contribs) 15:22, 16 November 2019 (UTC) this ^^^ might be of use to you too, right?! GregXenon01 (discuss • contribs) 15:24, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Thank you! We will definitely refer to it. I'll add this to our suggested literature section below too.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 15:52, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey guys, I would also just like to suggest a topic we should later on discuss in the discussion section. We can discuss the economics of big data, with regards to the commodification of human data specifically, many scholars are now stating that data is the new oil, it has become a much more valuable resource and it is a fast-growing industry, big tech companies and third-party organizations are making huge profits through trading and leveraging user data. I have added a relevant article in the section below for your reference. Sara Hamad El Niel (discuss • contribs) 11:05, 17 November 2019 (UTC)

I agree I think that's a really important point to explore. Thank you for that. The documentary on Netflix called The Great Hack really delves into the value of information in today's world. It is definitely worth watching.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 13:06, 17 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey again guys, I just had another read of the most recent content we all included, and I have realized that we are talking about two different aspects at the same time. In the political life section, we mentioned that social media as a catalyst of social change and thus giving way to democracy, whereas Nicola you have mentioned in your discussion on the CA scandal that social media is depriving users of their democracy. However, I've also noticed that there is no unified consensus on this claim, and most of the literature points out to both of these claims and they can both be correct, so maybe we can expand more on this and include both sides of the argument throughout the article? What do you think? Also Papacharissi could be a great reference for this [User:Sara Hamad El Niel|Sara Hamad El Niel]] (discuss • contribs) 13:12, 17 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey guys, I added some information to my part. I will be adding some more things into the use/misuse of data part after I will do some more research. I am very happy with our progress and I think we are on the right track. Also great catch Sarah! I think it will be great that we point out there is no unified claim about this problem, as you said! Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

Thank you Klara. It looks great. Well done to all, we're on the right track!

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 19:27, 17 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys. Sara you are right about this and thank you for pointing it out - there is no one correct answer as social media can be seen in both a positive and negative light in relation to democracy and the political sphere. I agree that the literature included in the essay should touch upon both of these points. It shouldn't be disregarded. At the same time, we need to keep in mind that we are talking about social media and politics in relation to the private sphere, and not in a general context. This is why we chose to focus on the Cambridge Analytica case in the first place - because it gives rise to questions surrounding privacy at a political level. So, even though I believe that it is important to mention both sides of the argument as you're suggesting, I think the focus still needs to be on this idea that social media and politics give rise to privacy issues.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 19:24, 17 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, to add on to this point I came across an interesting video with the journalist who first broke the story about Cambridge Analytica. Here she is discussing the damages to democracy: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MUa34097Xrk

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 22:10, 18 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, I've added on to my section and incorporated the literature being used for the Private Life section (boyd, Turkle and Pariser) into the Discussion part about the private life by linking the theory to the case study. I think that we're doing a great job and it's all linking together very well.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 18:51, 21 November 2019 (UTC)

I still need to work on the political part of the Discussion section. Sara, what do you think about the point made earlier? I think it's best that I work on linking your section with the discussion once we've agreed on the direction we'll be taking for it, so as to build our work in a consistent manner.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 18:53, 21 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey Nicola, yes, I agree with the approach you mentioned earlier, I will rework my part a little to mainly focus on the private sphere and linking it to the CA and FB case study, but still shed light on both sides. I'll also include the same in the introduction. Hey Klara, can you please just add a short paragraph for your part in the introduction? then I will complete the rest of the intro. Sara Hamad El Niel (discuss • contribs) 09:37, 22 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Sara, perfect. I will work on my part for the discussion in the same way. Pariser's (2012) work touches on the points we've been discussing quite a lot and I'll be including his work if you'd like to refer to it too.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 12:37, 22 November 2019 (UTC)

Klara, you might wish to refer to the reference suggested by Dr.Singh as part of the introduction to our essay as it "examines our need for privacy and why it is valued so highly, as well as what constitutes an invasion of privacy" :) You may read more from: https://global.oup.com/academic/product/privacy-a-very-short-introduction-9780198725947?cc=gb&lang=en&

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 12:39, 22 November 2019 (UTC)

Sara, I just added on to my section about social media and the political life, it is still not finished but I put it in as it is for now just so that we can help each other in making sure that what we are saying is consistent. There is an article by Peter Dahlgren (I've added it to our reference list below) in which he talks about participation and citizenship. Even though he is mostly concerned with the public sphere, I believe there are some useful points to be extracted in the context of our work. Let me know what you think.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 20:54, 22 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi ladies, great job on adding more information to our essay. As you said, I think we are doing a great job. Also, thank you, Nicola, for the great reference. I totally forgot on this one! I will definitely use it for the introduction. I will be adding more information to my part next week after I will be done with my topic research!

Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

Great! I'll also be adding on to the introduction too in the coming days.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 19:29, 23 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey ladies, great work so far indeed! and I will be looking through the references you guys mentioned above and write accordingly. I am aiming to have my part completed asap. Sara Hamad El Niel (discuss • contribs) 16:15, 24 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, great. Please also keep in mind to reference accordingly. It can be a little time consuming but doing it whilst writing is helpful.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 12:02, 25 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, I've concluded my main part and inserted all of my references. Sara, I still need to refer to your part if we're going to touch upon the point of social media as a positive tool. We have 3 days left to finalise everything ladies, we're almost there but there are still some things we could refine till then :)

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 17:44, 25 November 2019 (UTC)

This is another interesting article describing the negative effects that the Cambridge Analytica scandal created surrounding political implications https://www.versobooks.com/blogs/3720-cambridge-analytica-and-the-death-of-the-voter

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 17:46, 25 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, I've been trying to insert an external image to the essay but I'm not too sure how to go about it. Do you know how by any chance please? Thank you!

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 18:37, 25 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey Nicola, sure thing, I am working on it right now and will hopefully be done with it by tonight. Also, regarding the image, maybe this link could help? https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Help:Adding_image Sara Hamad El Niel (discuss • contribs) 19:33, 25 November 2019 (UTC)

Perfect, and thank you for the link!

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 16:24, 26 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi again guys, so I included in a paragraph in the introduction and I have updated the political life bit too - so after doing my research, the main consensus here is that social media could be used both as a tool for users to voice their beliefs and for political parties to suppress democracy simultaneously, as it is a free space after-all, it can be used as a tool for both sides. Also Klara, I moved your introduction bit to the top 'Introduction' section as I feel like it would be more suitable there, I haven't made any changes to it in case you still have changes to make - so let me know what you think? Shall we move it to Introduction of keep it in the private life section?. Looking forward to receiving your feedback guys! Still work in progress though. Sara Hamad El Niel (discuss • contribs) 22:37, 25 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Sara, sounds good to me I think that makes sense to mention. For the part about social media being a tool for users to voice their beliefs, I mentioned a part in the discussion touching upon this and raised the question: "What if our political opinions are not really our own?" This is because even though social media provides the space to voice our opinions, there are instances (such as the CA case), whereby political parties manipulate our opinions through targeted adverts served specifically to sway your beliefs. So, how sure can we be that our opinions have not been decided for us? Political parties might be suppressing democracy in this way.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 16:31, 26 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, the information mentioned in the introduction is very useful, well done. However, I do think we could cut it down. The introduction seems quite long as it is. We can revise it during our meeting tomorrow and decide where to place all of the useful information we have been discussing and drafting.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 16:35, 26 November 2019 (UTC)

I think that the introduction is better in the top section too! I was thinking of doing it as well. I will be adding some more information to my part tonight, so we can discuss everything tomorrow! And I agree with you Nicola that the introduction is a bit too long.

Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

Great ladies, I think we are all in agreement. See you later.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 09:06, 27 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Klara, I think your part is great. Do you think we could shrink the size of the image you inserted slightly? Also does the image need to be referenced?

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 12:21, 27 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Nicola! The most important part of the image is to be able to read the privacy settings and that is tough to read it when I make it smaller. I will try at least a little! Also, I used the picture from Wiki Commons, so it doesn't have to be referenced. :)

Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

You're right, if it isn't legible in a smaller size we can leave it as it is. Ok that's perfect. I'll also include a couple more images too.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 12:38, 27 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey guys, what do you think if we add our main research question as a heading in our introduction? I realised that it isn't really introduced.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 12:47, 27 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey Nicola, good point and yeah I think we should add it somewhere below the introduction just to make sure what we're talking about is clear. Sara Hamad El Niel (discuss • contribs) 12:57, 27 November 2019 (UTC)

Ok I'll amend it now! I've also re-structured my part slightly and moved the discussion part to a new section, as we discussed since it flows better this way and concludes the essay nicely.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 13:02, 27 November 2019 (UTC)

In references, we mention boyd and Turkle twice. We should agree on the reference name, so its under one reference. How should we call them?

Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

Hi Klara, thank you for pointing this out! I've amended them accordingly. We should be good now.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 13:30, 27 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Sara, in your part you refer to the Me Too social movement - I focused one of the wiki exercises on the subject if you would like to refer to it as I explain its aims and its effects on politics.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 18:07, 27 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi guys, I think yesterday's meeting went really well. I've just read through everything this morning and made slight changes to the flow of the essay and tweaked the references. Sara, there is a reference you mentioned for Tucker et al. (2017), could you please send it over as I cannot seem to locate it myself. Thanks!

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 11:05, 28 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey Nicola, here you go: Tucker, J. A., Theocharis, Y., Roberts, M. E., & Barberá, P. (2017). From Liberation to Turmoil: Social Media And Democracy. Journal of Democracy, 28(4), 46–59. doi: 10.1353/jod.2017.0064 - let me know if you need anything else. Sara Hamad El Niel (discuss • contribs) 15:14, 28 November 2019 (UTC)

Thank you! Added it in. Please let me know what you think of the essay. It would be great if you could have a final read through it.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 15:19, 28 November 2019 (UTC)

I think it looks good! We did a great job.

Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

The chapter looks great, great work guys!!! Sara Hamad El Niel (discuss • contribs) 00:36, 29 November 2019 (UTC)

Perfect. Well done!

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 09:32, 29 November 2019 (UTC)

Literature and Annotated Bibliographies
Hello ladies! So following our lecture this morning I'm creating a section for us to use where we can post any useful and suggested readings for our essay :)

Suggested Literature
Ford, S. M. (2011). Reconceptualizing the public/private distinction in the age of information technology. Information, Communication & Society, 14(4), 550-567.

Pariser, E. (2012). The filter bubble: What the Internet is hiding from you. Penguin UK.

Papacharissi, Z. (2010) ‘A Private Sphere’ in A Private Sphere: Democracy in a Digital Age pp. 131-167

Turkle, S. (2011). Alone together: Why we expect more from technology and less from each other. Hachette UK.

Wacks, R. (2015). Privacy: A very short introduction. OUP Oxford.

Loi M., Dehaye P. O., (2017) If Data Is The New Oil, When Is The Extraction of Value From Data Unjust?. Philosophy and Public Issues. Retrieved from http://fqp.luiss.it/files/2018/10/PPI_06_Loi-Dehaye_vol7_n2_2017def.pdf

Dahlgren, P. (2006). Doing citizenship: The cultural origins of civic agency in the public sphere. European Journal of Cultural Studies, 9(3), 267–286.

Annotated Bibliographies
Papacharissi, Z. (2010) ‘A Private Sphere’ in A Private Sphere: Democracy in a Digital Age pp. 131-167

Here is an annotated bibliography I wrote for our engagement portfolio. I knew it would good for our Essay :)In “A Private Sphere” chapter, Zizi Papacharissi is rethinking what “private sphere” means. People use the digital space as a contingent private sphere, to express and discuss political matters. They create their own space where they reflect and act alone but not isolated. Papacharissi includes five new civic habits that emerge in the new digital space as a result of this. She also sees these habits as tendencies and not established habits. This chapter is an excellent reference for any research in the Private Sphere. Furthermore, it is a fresh engagement with some of the most important questions facing democracies today. Papacharissi concludes with a statement that the private sphere is an attempt at a new space and new sociality.

Klp00015 (discuss • contribs)

'''boyd, d. (2012). Participating in the always-on lifestyle. In The social media reader (pp.71-76). New York: New York University Press.'''

That's perfect thank you! For the second wiki exercise I actually wrote an annotated bibliography on danah boyd's work: boyd, d. (2012). Participating in the always-on lifestyle. In The social media reader (pp.71-76). New York: New York University Press.

In this chapter, danah boyd, an exemplary academic in social media, delves into the phenomenon of always-on culture. boyd asserts that, in today’s world, people are interruptible at all times of the day. This is because being connected to networks of people online is constantly assumed as a result of developments in technology. In this way, the online world is always nearby and we never really go offline. In response to the growth of technology, boyd focuses on understanding how to embrace the notion of always-on by striking a personal balance between attention and time. This chapter is useful in understanding the ways in which society interacts, including how we participate and engage online as individuals and with others through this online network.

Since you are focusing on the 'Private Life' section of the essay I actually think this could be a really useful source.

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 14:38, 16 November 2019 (UTC)

'''Turkle, S. (2011). Alone together: Why we expect more from technology and less from each other. Hachette UK.'''

I found a good annotated bibliography for Sherry Turkle's book Alone Together: Why We Expect More from Technology and Less from Each Other here: https://seminar28.wordpress.com/2015/06/28/annotated-bookshelf-alone-together-why-we-expect-more-from-technology-and-less-from-each-other/

In her book, Turkle confronts the notion of connectivity describing a world in which the relationships between people and technology are tethered through language, behaviour and embodiment. Turkle divides the book into two main sections to explore the subject. "The first half of the book focuses on the development of social robotics, while the second part “turns to the online life as it reshapes the self”, the psychological effects of social networking on its users. Turkle emphasises the symmetry between these two moments: “just as we imagine things as people, we invent ways of being with people that turn them into something close to things”. Throughout, Turkle asks what is lost in the “split between the screen and the physical real”, and she worries that although “we are connected as we’ve never been before…we seem to have damaged ourselves in the process”."

Nicolasmall (discuss • contribs) 15:09, 17 November 2019 (UTC)

INSTRUCTOR FEEDBACK: COLLABORATIVE ESSAY
Grade Description for Collaborative Essay:

Collaborative Essays of this standard roughly correspond to the following grade descriptor. Depending on where your actual mark is in relation to the making criteria as outlined in the relevant documentation, it should give you an idea of strengths and weaknesses within the achieved grade band overall:


 * Merit. Among other things, work of this standard will make a clear point in a clear way. It will relate concepts to original examples in a straightforward fashion. It will make effective use of the possibilities of the form (including links, as well as perhaps copyright-free videos and images, linked to from Wiki Commons). This work will demonstrate attainment of virtually all intended learning outcomes, clearly grounded on close familiarity with a wide range of supporting evidence, constructively utilised to reveal appreciable depth of understanding. The wiki markup formatting will be very clear.

General: In addition to the common marking scheme, there are three broad criteria widely employed in the Division, which are used to help assessors evaluate your work in a more general sense:

Quality of research: is there evidence of critical engagement with set materials?; is there evidence of independent reading of appropriate academic and peer-reviewed material? For this element, your work has been evaluated as: Merit

Originality of thought: Is argument well-articulated and well-supported?; is there evidence of critical thinking (through taking a position in relation to key ideas from the module, and supporting this position)?; is there evidence of relational thinking (through making connections between key ideas from the module and wider literature, and supporting these connections)?; is there evidence of independent critical ability? For this element, your work has been evaluated as: Merit

Clarity of expression: academic writing style and structure, and organisational skills For this element, your work has been evaluated as: Merit

Specific Feedback:


 * You have submitted a fairly well written response to the brief. Here you outline a number of arguments that specifically address the theme of private sphere (although a lot of your argument seems to be addressing issues of public sphere in all but name). Your discussion of the research evidences a familiarity and good working knowledge of a range of scholarship on your chosen topic. The example that you have chosen to discuss your theme is fairly well-chosen because of its public visibility and relevance.


 * The essay is written in a fairly fluid and accessible style, and your argument is very well structured generally, is critically engaged, and you have demonstrated some awareness of the contradictions inherent in the theme itself. This is good work.

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GregXenon01 (discuss • contribs) 11:36, 19 December 2019 (UTC)